First Draft- Introduction

The introduction

 Have you ever thought about the risk of Korean communities? A number of people now live in Korean. Maybe, the people of Korea are included in one city. However, we are really vulnerable to new disease. I will show one examples in United Statues. United Statues are very sensitive to Ebolavirus. They know that this disease can cause very big tragedy. So now, United Statues have big attention to it. Like this, Korea also has to give really big attention to it. However, Korean government didn't have any attention to this part. There are no efforts to prevent this tragedy individually.
 Although the medical advancement become top class in the world, Cities didn't take their line. It means Cities didn't have any effort to control Medical Detective. Therefore I suggests that  Korea's cities should have new way to control new disease and this way is that they control medical detectives.