First draft - Narration

My persuasive argument thesis is: Government should control the Medical Detective Systems to prevent tragedy of epidemic disease.

1. What do people already know about my topic?

My topic is really new thoughts so I should persuade my new ideas. May be all things people know about my topic is only governments do the medical detective works.

2. What research has already been done about my topic?

no....

3. What are the implications of my argument (What if I'm right? What if I'm right and people ignore me?)

 Cities will have effective systems to control the epidemic disease.  If people ignore me, they will have serious problems about epidemic disease and they can be victims of new virus.

The Narration :

 There is examples that individual did medical detective works. In 1854, Dr. John Snow tried to reveal the cause and solution of Cholera which outbreak in London. this work is considered as the first work of Medical Detectives. He firstly tired to have precise statistics and compare to each others.
 However, there are many challenges in his works. First, he couldn't have many research because, he did individual work. Second, he need much time to collect these statistics. and lastly during his work, many of people died because he need much time to confirm his theory for his government. It is true that there was no well conducted City communities, but now, we live in well organized city community which can solve these problems. Cities have enough abilities to solve this problems and we need to use this well organized community.
 Other example is about Ebolavirus. I will show the example of United States. Now, they try to control this new disease but, this works are done by federal or local governments. It means parties who do not know any situation in one area could conclude misunderstood decisions and could apply inappropriate policy to control new disease: Ebolavirus.
 Korea should consider this situation and should try to approach this situation by new ways. If cities control this situation, they can have really good way to deal with such new diseases.